The First Snowfall
The stars fall around me, landing around me...
Creating a white shining blanket.
Footsteps dotted artistically,
My skin a light purple...
The snow clouds heavy above me -
Protecting it's dark master...
The moon barely visible.
As I watch the night...
In amazement.
Falling Into Dreamland
I lay awake... Wide-eyed...
Awaiting... Waiting... Still waiting...
Time moves like it's dragging the day behind it...
Humming birds wings flutter inside of me...
Waiting... My eyes become slowly heavier...
Time passes... Creeping past unnoticed,
Sleep joins it... As I slowly...
Fall into a deep, deep sleep.
2 comments:
Particularly like the idea of stars becoming snowflakes and
"Time moves like it's dragging the day behind it"
Do you need a lot of "..." punctuation? It can be very effective, but what's it look like without it?
:)
I think these poems go well together. First it snows, then after you have drunk in the scene you go to bed and slowly fall asleep. Agree about the phrase "dragging the day behind it" - very effective.
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